Overall, I think I did okay on my work. Obviously I need more work on it though, it is far from perfect. I made the mistake of waiting to work on it and not working on it as soon as it was assigned. I did a little bit when it was initially assigned, I made my blog and made the pages and put a few things on my home page, but I didn't start trying to find the found texts or the images. I also didn't start my story, though I had the idea almost immediately, or even try to find any information I might have needed for it. When the due date is so far away, not to mention just getting back from summer, it's hard for me to work on it. This goes for anything though, and it's a problem I need to work on.
One of the other things I have to figure out is how to get rid of the white behind some of my text I honestly have no idea why that's there or how to get rid of it. Also, some of my analysis could use more work to be more in depth since I felt like for some of it I was mostly just saying the same thing over and over again, or only stating the obvious.
I think I may try to find some different poems or song lyrics because that would really help me refrain from saying the same thing over and over again. A lot of my poems are essentially carrying the same message, and several are pretty evident which leaves little room for analysis. I know even if I do that my work will still carry the same general point, but I won't be saying it constantly in nearly every analysis at least, or rather I hope I won't.
I think my gallery is okay, and even if I feel like I might try to find another picture I find it hard to find a good picture that's creative commons. I may still give it a try though, after I work on my found texts more since that has priority over my gallery. The gallery is low among my priorities of revising.
My creative work definitely needs more work. I left it too late to start on it so it's not the kind of work I wanted. I certainly have the general idea of what I wanted to do, but I need more information to effectively carry it out and turn it into a story. I'm currently lacking the research and the time. It has potential to be excellent, but it needs more information and a lot more work. I would most definitely appreciate any feedback on that or suggestions to make it better.
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ReplyDeleteI thought your page was well done! Your analyses and pieces lacked a few details here and there, but I think you chose a good position and good pieces to include in this work. Revise and fix up all the holes and it'll be great!
For my peers whose blogs I commented on and those whose blogs I will comment on, Naytin is Asia. When I started the blog project google switched my account to my hotmail account instead of my school account, I didn't realize till I had already started. I apologize for this but this comment is just to clarify things.
ReplyDeleteAlso, thanks for all the suggestions Jennifer, I'll do my best to follow them.
Overall your page and your blog is very well done. The only thing I would recommend is to work on your analysis more so that the reader fully understands the connection between your evidence and the word equality.
ReplyDeleteNice, very honest on how you did on your page. Honesty is the best policy. Try to take your errors to heart and fix them in the draft.
ReplyDeleteThanks guys. I appreciate all the comments and I'll do my best to fix my errors.
ReplyDeleteSeriously though, any one know how to get rid of the random white highlighting?? It's really annoying me.